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(2)你们家的价值观是什么?
【指导说明】首先重新阅读短文中有关“价值观”的内容,从中找出相关的价值观填入表格,然后拓展相应的价值观,根据“主题句+支撑句”的写作模式,对范文和选文进行鉴赏、对比、评议和纠错,最后围绕“讲述自己的家庭价值观”展开写作。
【范文鉴赏】Myfamilyvalueswereprimarilyshapedbymymother.*Asachild,,butIshouldneversacrificemyhonestytocoverformymistakes.
【范文润色】范文有错误。…Asachild,shealwaysremindedmetobepunctualandtoworkharder.润色为:As/WhenIwasachild,shealwaysremindedme…harder.句中的she是指mymother,从asachild来看,child应该是指代I并非mymother。
【选文①】*Ourfamilyvaluesarevariousthatfamiliesshouldrespectandhonestwitheachotherandweshouldhelpeachotherwhenintrouble.*What'smore,familiesshouldbealwayskeepaoptimisticattitudetowardslife.【姚嘉欣,3分+14分】
【润色①】'smore,themembersarealwayskeepinganoptimisticattitudetowardslife.
【选文②】*Asformyfamily,'smore,theyalsoadmirepeoplewhoalwayslendahandtoothersinneed.
【润色②】 Asformyfamily,'smore,myfamilyalsoadmirepeoplewhoalwayslendahandtoothersinneed.
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(3)请以你个人的经历说明你们家的价值观对你的影响。
【指导说明】首先针对写作要点寻找最佳句式表达,然后根据“主题句+支撑句”的写作模式,对范文和选文的语言进行鉴赏、对比、评议和纠错,最后采取“叙述+结论”的方式进行写作。
【范文鉴赏】,I'''llbestraight-forwardandtellthemthetruth,,“Whenwe'rehonest,weearnothers' trustandsociety'scredit.”
【选文】Underourfamilyvalues,'tblameme,butcomfortedmeandadvicedmetobeoptimistic.*Theytoldmethattomorrowwillbebetter,,.【姚嘉欣,3分+14分】
【润色】Underourfamilyvalues,………andthenIrefreshedmyselfand…,,agoodfamilyvalueisimportantforeveryone.
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